I'll confess that I didn't read the entire proposed ordinance word for word, only perused it.
Good try but there are some aspects that appear to be obstacles.
* The NIH factor, not invented here - in the legislature/council.
* So long as we have an administration in DC that is so hostile to law enforcement, it has to be expected that any Village, Town, City that tries to do anything about illegal immigration, the screams or racism and civil rights will issue forth from our DOJ who will sue and from attacks by the ACLU and MALDEF.
Just a thought. You may try -
http://irli.org/. That's FAIR's legal branch. They offer legal help.
Try Michael Hethmon.